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EXT. Central park - mid-day

PAN:Camera panning through park

A bright and sunny day with almost no clouds and little wind. The park was almost empty due to the football championship game being played several blocks away. The park is filled with lush green trees and an assortment of colored flowers. There is a slight breeze blowing peddles and leaves on the ground. There are virtually no shadows. Only person visible is an old lady sitting on a bench.

NARRATOR

Such a nice day in the park. I'm glad I have the park all to myself. Look at the beautiful trees, the lovely flowers and uhmmm some old lady. My, they give me the creeps.

This old lady is short and has a slight hunched back. She has her hair in a pony tail with big round glasses that cover most of her face. The wrinkles in her face sag. She wears a white blouse with a purple dress past her knees. Here purse is the size of a first grader's backpack and colored olive green.

PAN:right

EXT. CENTRAL PARK - MID-DAY - park entrance

A little boy and his mother are seen walking through the entrance of the park. The little boy is seen running around his mother with lots of excitement.

Jimmy is a little boy the age of seven. He is very energetic and naive. He is seen wearing a red shirt with black pants. He is also quiet thin. His head slightly bigger than his body.

Jimmy's mother is seen with a white shirt and blue jeans. She is easy going and laid back.

CLOSE UP: jimmy

The little boy holds his hands out to his mother, gesturing her to give him something.

narrator

Hmmm what's this?, Little Jimmy is holding his out as if...

Little Jimmy tugs on his mother's shirt and gestures once more.

NARRATOR

Ohhh, he wants some candy...

Suddenly Jimmy's excitement changes to depression.

NARRATOR

Yes, now look at him. He realizes he made a mistake in not finishing his dinner, but yet he does'nt care, he just want some candy now.

WIDE: Jimmy and mother

Realizing that his mother won't give in and give him some candy, he starts stomping and whaling as he storms off to the left, kicking rocks and smashing sticks along his path as he leaves the scene.

EXT. CENTRAL PARK - MID-DAY - Park bench

WIDE: Half the bench showing with jimmy on far right

A partially shown bench with a bunch of candy wrappers laying on the ground next to it.

NARRATOR

Wait a minute Jimmy, What's that over there?

Jimmy looks up and quickly runs over to the wrappers.

MEDIUM CLOSE UP: jimmy by the wrappers

He starts ripping at them in hopes of finding some delicious candy in them.

He finds nothing and is once again sad.

He admits defeat and takes a seat on the bench.

PAN: Left

NARRATOR

Come on Jimmy, why don't you ever pay attention?

Jimmy glances over to the other side of the bench and finally sees the old lady that has been sitting there the whole time eating candy.

Jimmy then repositions himself and holds his hands out to her with a huge smile, shaking and quivering from all of the excitement he is feeling.

NARRATOR

Maybe it'll work this time!...

The old lady just sits there without acknowledging Jimmy's presence.

NARRATOR

Wow, this old lady is like a brick. No reaction at all. Hmmmm, don't give up just yet Jimmy I have an idea.

NARRATOR

Try to trade with her.

Jimmy grabs a stick.

NARRATOR

Yes, old ladys need a nice walking stick.

Old lady is not fazed and just glares at him while continuing to eat her candy.

NARRATOR

Hmmm, I got it Jimmy, give her a bunch of rocks so that she may protect herself.

Old lady glares at him a little more intensely as he tries to give her a bunch of rocks he found nearby.

NARRATOR

My that is such a huge purse, I wonder what does she carry around in there.

cuts to fuzzy white circle with scene in background

INT. Narrator's imagination

A twelve inch sub-sandwich appears followed by a walker for old people and then an wig.

cuts back to scene with Jimmy and old lady

EXT. CENTRAL PARK - MID-DAY - PARK BENCH

Jimmy is still trying to give the old lady the rocks but she just continues to glare at him and eat her candy.

He sees that he is getting nowhere and gets angry all over again.

Jimmy is seen crying and throwing a tantra with his legs dangling off the bench swinging wildly back and forth.

NARRATOR

Awwwww... Poor poor Jimmy, don't give up just yet. Please stop, you look like you're three years old or something.

NARRATOR

Wait! Look Jimmy I think it may have worked

Seeing this, the old lady finally cracks and acknowleges him. She opens up her purse wide open and holds it towards Jimmy.

She motions for him to take some candy.

Jimmy instantly stops his act and his face lights up with joy.

NARRATOR

Go ahead Jimmy, go for it!

NARRATOR

Nooo wait Jimmy!!

Jimmy reaches his hands into the old lady's purse and he is quickly consumbed by it.

A loud burp is heard coming from the purse.

NARRATOR

Ohhh my it's too late, that was just horrible, how could this possibly happen?

NARRATOR

I am so so sorry Jimmy.

CLOSE UP: Old lady and purse

A sinister grin is seen on the old lady's face as she once again starts to eat her candy.

fades to black

fades to candy wrappers on ground

EXT. CENTRAL PARK - MID-DAY - PARK BENCH - wrappers

CLOSE UP: candy wrappers

The closest candy wrapper reads "Jimmy," the second wrapper reads "Carl," the next "William," another "Joe," and lastly "Manson."

NARRATOR

See I knew there was something creepy about an old lady with a huge purse in the middle of the park...

cuts to black

Credits

Pitch

Elevator Line

You better hide your dog, your car and your kids because old ladies with big old purses will get them if your not careful.

Pixar Style Pitch

Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Jimmy, who seemed to always be so excited. This boy loved candy, but hated vegetables very much. He often ignored his mother when she talked about the dangers of talking to strangers.

Every day, he would pretend to listen so that he may go out and play.

One day, he decided to not finish his dinner full of horrible vegetables, which just so happens to be the day he gets to go to the park.

Because of that, he wasn’t allowed to have any candy, no matter how much he pouted and begged.

Because of that, Jimmy got angry and stormed off in a fit, wondering why he couldn’t have his candy.

Until Finally, he meets an old lady with a huge purse full of candy. But, unfortunately he would also meet his end by getting swallowed up by this purse, all because he never paid attention to what his mother tried to teach him about talking to strangers.

Look and Feel Research

Synopsis, Structure Sheet, 3 Act Structure

        Synopsis

       The name of the story will be “The Purse.” It is about a little boy named Jimmy at the age of seven that gets over anxious and loves to have his way. Jimmy is always well-dressed thanks to his mother. He wears some blue jeans with a nice green collar shirt. He really loves candy but isn't allowed to have any because he never finished his dinner like he is told to. The setting will be in a kitchen and then a park. There is an old lady that just wants to enjoy her time at the park. She has big round glasses that take up most of her face. She isn’t very tall and is hunched over with a larger than normal purse. She doesn’t seem to be the nicest person ever and would rather be left alone. All Jimmy wants is to get some candy, and the old lady just wants to be left alone to enjoy herself. This story plays off of Cautionary Tales like, "Don't talk to strangers," "Be mindful of your parents," with bits of karma mixed in.

PLOT STRUCTURE SHEET

Title: The Purse



Who is the story about? (Hero/Protagonist) A little boy named Jimmy



What does the protagonist want? He wants candy



What is in the way of the protagonist to get what he/she wants? His mother and an old lady



What does the protagonist need? To finish his dinner



What is in the way of the protagonist to get what he/she needs? They are at the park, a long ways from home.




What is the beginning situation (not more than 2 sentences) Him and his mother are at the park and asks for some candy.



1st turning point (1 sentence) She tells him no because he never finished his dinner.



New Situation (not more than 2 sentences) He runs off



2nd turning point (1 sentence) He finds candy and an old lady sitting down on a bench.


Final Situation (not more than 2 sentences) She shows him she has lots of candy in her purse.




3 Act Structure

Act I

            Exposition – A seven-year-old boy named Jimmy and his mother are having dinner. He didn’t want to finish his dinner because he was excited about going to the park and the mother was forced to throw away the rest of it. Jimmy ultimately wants candy because he loves it more than regular food.

            Inciting Incident – Jimmy wants candy from his mother but doesn’t get any because he never finished his dinner. He gets angry and storms away.

Act II

            Obstacles – Meets an old lady with candy, but the old lady doesn’t want to share with him. First he holds his hands to her. Second he tries to trade her with a stick. Last he tries to trick her into looking another way so he can sneak some from her.

            First Culmination – Jimmy finds candy wrappers near a bench. Turns out to be candy wrappers from an old lady sitting on the bench.

            Midpoint – Jimmy finally admits defeat and leaves the old lady alone. He pouts and slumps in the bench kicking his legs.

Act III

            Climax – Old lady looks at pouting boy and gives in. She opens up the purse and motions him to take some candy out. When Jimmy reaches in, he is quickly sucked into the purse.

            Denouement – Old lady goes back to eating her candy from the purse with a huge grin on her face. Mother is shown passing back and forth past the old lady looking for little Jimmy.